So what qualities do you have that will ensure your success? But then again, this all sort of depends on what your prompt for the essay is. Jan 5, '07 by trepinCT Joined: It depends on what the school is looking for. I would start out with a short Bio. Then I would write about why I want to become a nurse, then I would kiss their butts a little and mention why I have "chosen" their school to persue my goal.
That can simply be done by looking up the schools mission statement philosophy and work it into your essay in your own words. Can finish with" I dont want to just be a nurse , I want to be a graduate of "school name" school of nursing " Yours is a good essay, but I might rearrange your essay to put your Bio first and edit the first 2 paragraphs into the 1 paragraph and make that the middle.. I agree that you need to tell them why you will be a good candidate for their program..
Its good, but It gives the appearance of a speech. Who you are, why you want to be a nurse , why you chose thier school and why you are a good candidate for their program. Last edit by trepinCT on Jan 5, ' Jan 5, '07 by Moondance Joined: Since I was returning to school for a second career, I thought it would be important for them to know why I had chose to pursue nursing, what it would mean to me, and what I thought I could bring to the nursing profession.
I think trepinCT had some great feedback on your essay. I sent mine in a few months ago, but it was composed in practically the same order as trepinCT mentions. Jan 8, '07 by zefutebolera Joined: Thank you so much for your suggestions! I really appreciate it!
It helped me a lot. This is my revision, please tell me what you think. Everyday I would see them on the streets begging others for money just so they could treat their ailing relatives. It made me more aware of the situation and now that I am more mature, I know that I could do my part to help the situation. I would have chosen to become a doctor, yet I believe that being one would make me feel numb about the patients feelings and be more concerned with treating their diseases.
I chose nursing because this allows me to interact more with people. Nursing is a very powerful profession, it allows people to influence and touch lives. I am very willing to achieve this big responsibility. I am eager to be there for the patients through illness, injury pain, loss, grieving, birth, growth, aging and health. I am very eager to care for someone and experience that great feeling. I felt that I was helpless for some time, and I believe that now is the time to be there for others and help them through their challenging times.
I am open and honest to communication, and these are also important traits that a nurse needs. Personally, having the opportunity to impact someone everyday is very powerful. Nursing is one of the few careers that does not only help others but also helps yourself. It is a profession that is exciting, ever changing, diverse, and allows opportunity for learning something new everyday.
I chose the College of Health Professions of Temple University because I believe that this would significantly educate and prepare me for my future in nursing. The College of Health Professions also stands out as a national leader in the education of health professionals. I am very pleased with my experience as a Temple undergraduate and I believe that the College of Health Professions would be consistent with that or be even better.
Being a nurse is tough, but in the end of the day, I will say that this is that path that I chose and I am proud of it, then I will remember that feeling of helping a complete stranger and at that moment, I will feel rewarded. Jan 8, '07 by trepinCT Joined: Try to be more brief, I was given advice from a few instructors and directors of nursing schools and they said to keep it brief. It would even help for you to show your essay to a writing professor at your school.
Did you already take composition? Maybe ask that professor to check it out, even your College counselor can look over your essay.. You have the skill to write a great essay, you really know how to put your feelings into words, you just need to edit it a bit more, they want more of YOU in the essay should be more of a BIO.. Mention that seeing the poverty and lack of good health care drove you to the desire to become a nurseThat is a few of your sentences rolled up into one brief explanantion of your experience in the Phillipines edit and Everywhere you defined what a nurse is or should be..
I would love to help you out and go through the whole essay with you because it has so many strong points. I Hope I am not offending you with my critique. When is the essay due???? Let me know if you would like more help. My brother in law is an RN and now an administrator, he also spent time as an instructor as was another RN friend of mine and they really helped me clean up my essay , shorten it and still make it powerful.
Dont mention that your education with them would be consistent or better.. My mind if flowing with ideas!!!!
Let me know of you need more!!!! The essay is due on Feb 15, but I want to submit it as soon as possible since I'm starting my second semster next week.
I don't want to worry about this plus school. I'm gonna edit it more tomorrow and I'll repost it again! Thanks so much for your suggestions it really helps a lot. Thank you so much! Best of luck in nursing school. Your essay is really an inspiration. Good luck with the transfer. Did you happen to read this post? It might be of interest to you. I hope you love UT as much as I did! Very well written essay. I have one week left until the deadline and…..
Hi Cristina, I wrote this in a previous comment and it is a good formula: What did you bring to the profession between undergrad and grad school? I learned everything I could about nursing by becoming a travel nurse then I went into private duty. I saw a way to better help those patients so I formed my own LLC and now I practice as a concierge nurse and a consultant. Nurse entrepreneurship is a way to elevate the profession to a new level. I wrote that students should have the option to study business in nursing to prepare them for the role of CEO.
I also talked about nurses taking individual responsibility for health promotion. In addition I crammed a lot into my paper! I wrote that bedside nursing can be isolating especially travel nursing and I have reached a point in my career where advancement requires collaboration.
I want to be in a supportive environment that promotes personal and professional growth. I also did a little research into what NYU wants to be known for and noted that our goals are the same. I hope this helps! Grad school is wonderful. What an Awesome write up Gail….. Oh yes am proud to be a nurse…. Nursing really has connected me to the human condition and I am so grateful for the privilege to do it. Thank you for your kind and honest comment.
I am trying to decide between education or leadership. I asked a very respected physician that I worked with what I should do. I said that I wanted the most interesting life filled with unusual opportunities and few limitations.
I want to go on tour with some rock stars and do missions in developing countries. I want to report health information and host a TV show and write a few books.
I want to continue to grow my business Nightingale Wellness and develop a fleet of concierge RNs to make house calls. He said NP without a doubt and assured me that I will be able to teach nursing with my NP degree and a full resume.
She said that globally, in years, there will be no nursing in developing countries. The World Health Organization [WHO] came out with a report that showed nursing was too expensive and that lay people can be taught certain aspects of care for much less money.
So nurses are being phased out. The reason for this is because there are no nurses working for the WHO to represent the profession when guidelines are being drafted. There are also no nurses working at the World Bank the 1 governing body concerning global health decisions and there are very few nurses in government in any country. Nursing is being squeezed out of every conversation even in the hospital level.
Very rarely will you find a nurse on the board. The decision to go into education or leadership is personal. However, I just wrote your admission essay for nursing leadership in this comment. You can teach at any point in your life with a graduate degree and a full resume. Leadership is where nurses are needed and the opportunities are limitless.
Hi Gail, Thank you so much for your input. Really made my day. I will let you know how things turn out! I feel like my essay sounds too comfy and not professional.
Do you have any tips??? Thank you for posting! Thanks for the compliment, Christi. Writing in a comfy style is not a bad thing as long as you are using proper grammar. Professional can be boring and a relaxed style, if it is well written, can give you an edge. As for tips, there are plenty to read in the comments of this post and I hope they help. Best of luck to you! Last time I wrote a personal statement like thing was years ago and I had no idea where to start.
Thank you so much for this. I am currently applying to UTMB and this helped tremendously! It was very inspiring and so well written! I am very blessed to come across your blog today. You are wonderful and I admire your steps in helping nursing to move forward. I want to join your team! I live in New York too, I am from a third world country. I want to be a vessel for changes both here and abroad especially in the country where i came from. I am applying for NP and i dont know where to start with my essay.
Good luck with your essay. I am almost done with my first quarter of nursing school at the University of Washington. I was wondering if you have any advice for a student looking to start her nursing career on the east coast more specifically in NYC? I am looking at nursing residency programs and 10 week internships for the summer of Any advice would be greatly appreciated! Definitely write about becoming an NP. I believe this was mentioned in a previous comment. There is some good info in the comment section of this post as well as the comments for the grad school essay.
Good luck with your application! What a powerful personal essay — thank you for sharing. However, my university asks for an extensive written application, personal statement included. I applied and was offered an interview just before the deadline. The next step is a 15 minute interview over webcam — my school changed its method this year and is doing it this way for all applicants.
My question to you, is how do you suggest making an impression in 15 minutes over Skype essentially. Not based on a 15 minute interview. Make sure all of these things are in order or your message will not be heard.
The interviewers want to see that you are on your way to becoming a leader in the profession and being prepared is key. Second to that is being personable. Always have a couple of favorite stories in mind to share. Write then down on paper in front of you along with important career highlights and dates.
I wanted you to know that your essay has withstood the test of time as I have used it as a source of encouragement!! I have a ton of nursing experience, but have been out of school for so long. Thanks so much for posting this essay! I am currently working on my essay for the nursing program at UTMB and have had trouble thinking of what to write about. Your example has helped so much! I am so happy I came across your blog.
It took me a long time to decide I wanted to pursue a career in nursing but I decided and I am in the process now of applications and even though I tend to be decent at writing, I am struggling with the personal essay a little, I just want it to really make an impact. Writing has always come naturally to me and I have always wanted to start a blog, just never did.
A few times I have thought about the idea of maybe starting one once I become hopefully! Yes, I'd like to subscribe. For Men For Women. Nursing is a Way of Life When contemplating a career choice, psychologists often suggest revisiting the activities that one took pleasure in as a child. Gail Ingram NP says:
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